The feedback was that most people were able to understand the story until the seventh frame, but the idea of exchanging the bones is unclear. This makes the twist unclear too. Hence, I'll have to work on it. Suggestions were to add an arrow pointing from Greeny to Orange's bone in the first frame, and adding a question mark to Orange to show his surprise. This will justify Orange's rejection in Frame 2. For the last frame (twist), I can do a prop for Orange's house, so that it will be clearer that Greeny left his bone for Orange.
Also, the sequence of the story is unclear. I guess Frames 4 and 5 are too spaced out. I'll have to indicate the order with arrows, or change it to page one's sequence for both pages.
Yup I will work on it!
By the way I just realised today that we have to do a black and white version for the namecard (Assignment 2). It'll be uploaded soon :)
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